Lost fic: watch me burn (Charlie)

[ozmissage]

Title: watch me burn
Character: Charlie/OFC
Rating: R (drug use)
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Summary: He can stop. He will. Just not today.
A/N: Written for lost_in_108 prompt #44 “tomorrow”; title snagged from that frakking Eminem song that I can’t stop listening to although it has nothing to do with this drabble…except for reigniting my love for angsty Dom face. Yes, yes special hell and all that jazz.

The girl tastes like ashes and vodka; he kisses her, fights the urge to gag. He tries for charming, but his whole body is shaking.

Three days clean and he’s already coming out of his skin.

“Come on gorgeous, take me home. You know you wanna.”

He punctuates each word with a roll of his hips; she’s just drunk and horny enough for this to work.

She takes him back to her hovel of a flat and Charlie runs his tongue over the track marks on her arm.

“You got anything?”

She tosses him a bump.

I’ll stop tomorrow, he promises himself as he inhales the first hit.

Comments

[mollivanders.livejournal.com]

Oh god. Charlie. <3

She takes him back to her hovel of a flat and Charlie runs his tongue over the track marks on her arm.

“You got anything?”

He slips back so quickly and you capture that wonderfully. Every line hits separately like it's a line of heroin, or something. So cool.

[ozmissage.livejournal.com]

Aww, thank you!

I'm just a wee bit concerned that watching a vid were he's playing an abusive ass made my brain go "there is a Charlie fic in there somewhere if we cut out all that pesky violence." That just goes to show Dom needs to get a regular gig ASAP because I'm clearly going through *ahem* withdrawals. Bad pun is bad. ;)

[emiv.livejournal.com]

This is very well done. It doesn’t make me feel warm and fuzzy, but I think that is the point. It is gritty and real.

Charlie runs his tongue over the track marks on her arm.

This line is so vivid and disturbing and clear. It jars you, reminds you what Charlie’s motivation here really is.

Overall, the word choice here is precise and to the point and the quick pacing gives a greater sense of desperation to the whole piece. Good job. :)

[irishunicorn03.livejournal.com]

So gritty and a little bit raw.

Love it.

[ozmissage.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! It's weird getting into that dark period of Charlie's life, but it's an interesting one to explore. :)

[ozmissage.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! :)

[valhalla37.livejournal.com]

Aaaagh, this is so raw and brutal -- I love it. There's something endlessly appealing (in a fascinatingly morbid way) about the Charlie here, how desperate and broken and hopeless he is. The whole thing just paints an incredible picture.

[ozmissage.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! Eminem reignited my love for super angsty Charlie. Somehow I don't think that was his intention though. ;)

[pann-cake.livejournal.com]

I really miss this side of Charlie, and you captured his need (and his "promise" to stop) so well.

He punctuates each word with a roll of his hips

Unf. I like it. :P

BTW, I always name fics after the songs that made me think of them, lol. Sometimes there's not rhyme or reason, lol.

[ozmissage.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! Gah. I miss Charlie so much, the show was never quite the same without him.

I'm glad I'm not the only one, sometimes a song just gets all wrapped up with a fic for no apparent reason.